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Reged: Feb 16 2004
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This thread is for comments about Torn, by Daniel Kaysen.
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Anonymous
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I enjoyed the sparse style and flow of this piece. Thanks for publishing it.
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Tim Pratt
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Beautiful, and compelling, and convincing, and fine. You did shamans right.
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SarahP
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Reged: Mar 08 2004
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Loc: Iowa City, Iowa
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Okay, so usually I'm Kaysen's biggest fan--I loved "What a Spaceman's Gotta Do" and "The Jenna Set." But this story didn't really work for me, and I'm trying to figure out why. Couple reasons, maybe.
First was, the story I had in mind while reading was Tim's "Little Gods," which probably isn't fair, as this is a very different story than that, though it has a somewhat similar theme.
Two is because of the format of the story--the story seems to break up into bits during the last third, which has some interesting thematic resonance, but I found it choppy going.
Finally, in this reader's opinion, the resolution felt a little inauthentic; that is, I didn't really buy that the protag morphed into a shaman. Also the attack by the previous wife seemed a bit abrupt and underplayed.
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